请大牛帮忙看看这样的雅思作文能得多少分。快考试了心里没底。题目是剑5 TEST1的作文题。谢谢谢谢

all these countries will have to deal with the problem of high proportion of elders in 2040, which will be a heavy burden for the whole society.
TASK 2
Following the modernized society. After 2005 the curve went up stably until the year of 2030. Researches widely conducted by all kinds of institutions have shown that undoubtedly. Males are usually good at logical thinking. Then it will fluctuate at 19% during 1995 to 2030. Afterwards a stable increase appears, finally reaching 26%.

The gigantic transform takes place in Japan, which has a very low percentage of elders before 2005. Thus. while females are excellent in areas like language. The elders never occupied over 5% of the total population in this period of time. For instance, male and female students had, the number of each subject is unrealistic to be equal.

Second, capable students lost their edge in competition with others just because of gender, merely pursuing the absolute equity in the number of males and females may ignore the basic capacity of knowledge that an individual has, social relation and so on. With different advantages, the curve reached the point of 23% in 2040 with predication.

Sweden’s line changed similarly to USA’s before 1995, females and males have the same right to receive education. And because female has always been looked down on, some compensations should be carried out. But it doesn’t mean we must be absolute equal in all areas while ignoring the certain needs. Subsequently the speed of increase slows down and the curve line ends up at 27%, the highest among all the three countriesTASK1
The curve line graph above illustrates the percentage of population aged 65 and over between the year 1940 and 2040 in USA, Japan. It is fairly unreasonable.

Admittedly.

As for USA, the trend is roughly increasing every year steadily except a slight decrease during 1980 to 1990, where there was just the time the Sweden surpassed. Finally, a male student with high marks may be refused by his ideal university just because a female must be in to balance the number, space configuration, etc, where there is a sudden, considerable increase to the point of 20%, the biases of the female has already been dismissed, which could have been seen as the extra height the former pressed ball bounces, to a point that was over concerned. Things come to be specialized with the argument that whether universities should accept students comprised of equal gender in all subjects, which I firmly opposed.

First, males and females differ in given talents. From this year on it drastically soars to the percentage of 25%, exceeding USA and Sweden successively.

Overall. It is manifest that all these countries are going to have more and more elders, and Sweden. As far as I concerned, giving everyone the equal opportunity to compete with other regardless of gender is a harmony phenomenon the society can and, simultaneously, should provide. Chasing absolute equity has no sense at all.

题目TASK1
The graph below shows the proportion of the population age 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information but selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
TASK 2
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

还是花钱找人改吧
去新东方批改网 20块钱100字，老师都是外国人,会以外国人的思维去改

no

路过 我也是要考试了

露珠湿沙壁，暮幽晓寂寂。

finally reaching 26%, the trend is roughly increasing every year steadily except a slight decrease during 1980 to 1990As for USA. Sweden’s line changed similarly to USA’s before 1995, where there is a sudden, considerable increase to the point of 20%. Then it will fluctuate at 19% during 1995 to 2030, which has a very low percentage of elders before 2005. The elders never occupied over 5% of the total population in this period of time. After 2005 the curve went up stably until the year of 2030. From this year on it drastically soars to the percentage of 25%. Finally, the curve reached the point of 23% in 2040 with predication. The gigantic transform takes place in Japan. Afterwards a stable increase appears, where there was just the time the Sweden surpassed, exceeding USA and Sweden successively. Subsequently the speed of increase slows down and the curve line ends up at 27%

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