托福口语 Task1 求修改指教~~~

Task 1
Which campus improvement do you suggest your school to invest in: swimming pool，cafeteria or dormitory. Please give specific reasons to support your opinion.

I'd like my school to improve the dormitory.
Dormitory is where we’ll live for a long time. Its environment is closely related to ourdaily life and a better dormitory environment will let us live a more comfortable life. Taking my school for an example, my school dormitory has no air condition, so it’s always too hot and humid to fall sleep during summertime.As a result, we often feel listless in the daytime. If the school could change this situation, we'll be more energetic and vigorous to study in the class.

求大神改改expression~~~~
选择dormitory我只想出了一个观点。。。。有没有思维开阔的能多给几个理由？

我给你想了几个理由 语言你自己组织下
比如 establish more dorm buildings. make the dorm less crowded so that students can have more private space to hold their books, clothes, and so on.
又比如 add some vending mechines in the building with vending machines, students who feel angry and have no time to go out to buy snacks in cafe can purchase things very conveniently in dorm.
还有 the school can purchase some fitness equipments and put them in some empty rooms in the dorm,change these rooms into a gym. after a busy study day, students really need a gym to relax themselves.

school anniversiry reason:i am a member of my school.i feel so happy and proud at this very moment. eg:1.i saw many famous stars i had seen just on tv. 2.i have no class that day and the only job for me is enjoying.many funny activities attracted me so much. 楼主要做的就是把这些东西连起来，开头再展开一点来说，就差不多45秒了。 至于万能句子，我还真没研究过。。。曾经到网上搜寻过，可是没找到。。但是网上好像这种句子还是有的。个人觉得口语考试的第一题，重要的是结构和逻辑，因为老美是比较看重逻辑的。当然，有几个漂亮的句子也会给你添彩的。 希望对你有用～

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