四级作文,请高手修改,

四级作文,请高手修改,
1.本社团的主要活动内容
2.加入本社团的优势
3.如何加入本社团
ladies and gentlemen,welcome to join our club which is named English Expoler.Now,I'm very pleasure to introduce you about main acitivity of our culb.First of all,we will take a party to understand each other in 7-203 on next sunday,and we will comunicate with everyone in English.Second,you will be required to attend a hiking in next month,just take yourself and we will prepare all you need.Then,we will hold a speech comperion about how to protect out environment.
If you join our club ,you will touch more English lover ,and if you are also a English lover,it,s must be pettry choice for you.What's more,you will get more knowledge about English nature which donn't learn from you lesson.
How to attend our club?I will be honour to tell you ,leave your name and cellphone number ,Li Ming,a header of our club,will contact with you later .Thank you very much.

1、pleasure改为pleased/delighted/happy,pleasure只能做名词或动词,不可用作adj..
2、introduce you about中的about去掉,这里得提到,introduce的短语为introduce sth.to sb./introduce sb.sth..且about同为介词,语法显然在此处有较低级的错误.
3、main activity改为main activities,名词之前记住要有冠词（the表特指,a/an表某一个）,没有冠词的话必须改为复数形式,这里的活动很显然应该使用复数形式表达.
4、take a party,一般不用这样的说法,虽没有语病,但是有些不地道,改为hold a party.
5、and we'll communicate with everyone in english,这样说意思上有问题,主语为we,宾语用everyone不好（可以用each other）,或者句子改为and we'll have a happy chat in english.
6、required改为invited,required表示要求、需求等意思,这里的意思为邀请,故用invited比较妥当.
7、comperion,不知楼主要写什么词,拼写错误,词典上也查不到,但根据句子成分分析,这个词完全可以去掉.
8、protect out environment中的out改为our,楼主的笔误.
9、you will touch改为you will get in touch with,楼主的表达很Chinglish,get in touch with sb.表示取得联系,stay/keep in touch with sb.为保持.
10、English lover,这个我不知道有没有这种说法,但是lover后要加s.
11、must be pettry choice中的pettry是个错词,想必楼主想写pretty,这个词意思多为漂亮的,可爱的,秀气的,优美的,令人愉快的等,用来修饰choice感觉不恰当,需要换个adj..
12、which donn't learn from you lesson,这个句子不通,语病为句子成分缺失,此处为which引导的定语,which后的句子应可单独成句,但你的句子里缺主语成分,所以修改为you'll get more knowledge about english nature which you can't learn from your class.；另外你的原句中donn't拼写错误,you需要改为your,lesson用这里不好,即使用也要加s.楼主的语法需要加强.
13、I will be honour to tell you中的honour不能用作形容词adj,只能做名词或动词,adj.形式为honourable,这里的句子可以改为i will be with great honour to tell you.
14、contact with you改为contact you,contact用作联系某人用的时候,是及物动词vt,直接加名词.
楼主的文章还存在些表述的小小问题,不过总的来说写的还可以,只是我比较苛刻罢了.
这里我给您几点建议：您的语法基础需要巩固,还有词汇上需要加强,用的话多注意不要多用拿不稳的词汇,另外多注意使用复合句,少一些中国化的简单句表述,文章中有几个亮点的话,会很不错哦!
——by 玛丽的魔术团队 Moya

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