帮我看一下我的自我介绍有没有错误好吗

Hello,it's a pleasure to meet you all.I am xxx .My English name is Alice.I am a friendly,lovely girl and I am generous to my friends and my classmates. I like reading and writing. They both give me a lot of fun and build my unique personality as well as my goal and dream. I'm very positive and look forwards to my future because I'm the one who will realize my goal. To tell the truth,I am a little bit nervous but I am really enjoy standing here.
Thank you!
错误的纠正哟

呵呵 你的英语功底不错啊 基本上没什么错误 但是也要注意换词啊 不要重复使用一个词 其中a lot of 可以用tremendous或者endless替代 我朋友给了我许多「无尽的」欢乐

I am a friendly,lovely girl and I am generous to my friends and my classmates. 这句就不对~没有英语这么表达的！你去掉and 用两个简单句好了~

我很无奈，你为什么一个劲的狂用and并列句呢~这样子句式显得十分单调，而且你用的还是错的，八竿子打不着的俩事情你竟然能用and连接起来，我很佩服你啊~

They both give me a lot of fun and build my unique personality as well as my goal and dream.

这句也一样，我觉得这没法子改啊~你的介绍也只有中国人听得懂了~~一看就知道是中国学生写的！其实我英语也不怎么样，只是看到你的，我建议你还是重写一篇吧~~我是实在看不下去了，希望你不要生气，我说的是实话，如果你想对自己负责，听我的重新写！当然，文章里还是有很多可取之处的，it's a pleasure to这个句型就很好~简短的文章是需要一些华丽的词语的，比如你look forwards to 还有a little bit nervous 就很好~这些短语显得文章比较像篇英语介绍！

写英文介绍，简短，但要表达出你的特点！就是要让别人记住你的闪光点，用词和举行很重要，要让人有眼前一亮的感觉，加油吧！如果实在不行，千万不要生拉硬套，切记切记

Hello,everyone !I'm very happy to see all of you .I am xxx .My English name is Alice.I am a friendly and lovely girl and I am generous to my friends and my classmates. I like reading and writing. They both give me a lot of fun and build my unique personality as well as my goal and dream. I'm very positive and look forwards to my future because I'm the one who will realize my goal. To tell the truth,I am a little bit nervous but I am really happy to stand here . Thank you!

有的地方我没看懂，你能把汉语给我吗？

我的火眼金睛没发现错误哦(⊙o⊙)

Hello,it's a pleasure to meet you .I am xxx .My English name is Alice.I am a friendly,lovely girl. I am generous to my friends and my classmates. I like reading and writing. Both of them give me a lot of fun and build my unique personality as well as my goal and dream. I'm very positive and look forward my future because I'm the one who realize my goal. To tell the truth,I am a little bit nervous but I am really enjoy standing here. Thank you! 一些小错误改了，见上，谢谢采纳！

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