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Wenshuai Who is My Roommate

Wenshuai has already got up half an hour ago and now is 6:36. It was the third times he has got up early to read on the campus.It made me surprised again.

With his conduct,I really left the bed where is warmer and sat near the computer with the clod wind.I never thought that he could make up his mind to work hard,ignored the desire what he did't want to leave the warm bed.BUT now ,he did it!

So I really stepped my way,I have been working from now on.I have just welcomed the sunshine though there is no stronger shines now and the fire which in my heart could never been blown out.

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Wenshuai Who is My Roommate, had already got up half an hour ago. Now it is 6:36. It is the third time that he has got up early to read on the campus.It surprises me again.

By his actions，I left the warm bed and sat near the computer with the cloudy wind.I had never thought that he could make up his mind to work hard,ignoring the desire of staying in the warm bed.BUT ,he did it!

So I stepp on my way,now。I will be working hard from now on.I have just welcomed the sunshine though its not Strong now。the fire in my heart could never been put out.

Wenshuai， Who is My Roommate，has already got up half an hour ago and now is 6:36. It was the third times that he has got up early to read on the campus.It made me surprised again.

With his conduct,I really left the bed where is warmer and is sat near the computer.I never thought that he could make up his mind to work hard,ignored the desire what he did't want to leave the warm bed.BUT now ,he did it!

So I really stepped my way,I have been working from now on.I have just welcomed the sunshine though there is no stronger shines now and the fire which in my heart could never been blown out.

Wenshuai Who is My Roommate ， already got up half an hour ago（ago和过去时连用） and now is 6:36. It is the third time he has got up early to read in the campus(在it is +the +序数词+time+that从句，句型中，某人第几次做某事，time表示第几次应用原形，如果前面是is，后面用现在完成时，如果前面是was后面用过去完成时）.It made me surprised again.With his conduct,I immediately left the bed which is warmer （这个定语从句中缺主语应该用关系代词which）and sat near the computer with the clod wind.I never thought that he could make up his mind to work hard and ignore（ignore和work是并列的谓语动词，英语中尽量不要用逗号来连接两个成分。） the desire that he did't want to leave the warm bed(这个从句中成分完整应该用that连接）.BUT now ,he did it!

So I really stepped my way,I must work hard from now on.I welcomed the sunshine though there is no stronger shines now and the fire which in my heart could never been blown out.

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