有哪个朋友可以给我修改作文中的语病啊

有哪个朋友可以给我修改作文中的语病啊
.For one thing,a lot of policies which about some graduated college students will be encouraged to support rural education,were published by education deparment.For another,our country will expend money in to teaching equipment of rural area recently.Finally,education deparment have provided aid to almost half of poor students so more and more students can continue learning knowledge.

On one hand,in order to support the rural education,a lot of policies which are about the graduated college students,were published by education deparment.On the other hand,our country will increase the investment in teaching equipment of the rural areas recently.What's more,education deparment has provided aid to almost half of the poor students ,so more and more students can continue learning knowledge.

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