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My hometown

My hometown lies in the southeast of Fujian province.There are many places of interesting such as Jiuli Lake.They are famous for beautiful scenes in the country.Can you guess the name of my hometown?Sure,its name is Xianyou.Now,let me tell something about my hometown.

Jiuli Lake is (仙游四大景之一【翻译】）It's famous for its cave.waterfall.strange rock.90 percent of the scenery was covered by water.there are also many rocks and trees around the scenery. So the air here is fresh and many birds are singing in the tree.Not only beautiful scenery but also (深厚的文化【翻译】）are interesting
in this place.My hometown is recognized the source of Dream culture. Now Dream culture has been cultural heritage。

As the saying:A bird in the hand is worth two inthe tree.Do you want to visit my hometown?Come on!

麻烦修改一下

1：places of interest 固定搭配。名胜古迹

2：such as举例至少要举两个

举一个用 for example

3：cave waterfall rock都可数。要+s

4：一个文章用一个时态。90%那句话里的was 改为is

5：not only... but also...否定提前。是半倒装句。

建议改为

The scenery here is not only beautiful but also intresting.

这样清楚明了。如果一定要用倒装的话则为。

Not only does it have a beautiful sight but also it is a intresting place to visit.

Now与一般现在时连用。不能用于完成时

has been变为is

最后一句。古人云之类都是用

saying是名词。后面需要接动词。

As the old saying puts that:

你引用的名言跟你的。。作文也很不符合。。那句话的意思是一鸟在手比两鸟在林好。

就是教育大家不要吃着碗里望着锅里的。。

、建议你换一句

East ,west,home is best.家永远都是最好的。

最后提一点。你用风景这个词。一直用的都是scenery。~建议换一些同义词。sight, sight-seeing,landscape都是很常见的风景同义词。

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