帮我看看这段英文里有没有什么错误。。积分增加ING。。

although this doll is not gorgeous, not exquisite,not valuable .even if simple and poor.
it expresses my most heartfelt benediction for my precious friend Vivi.
I sincere bless you will be happiness . healthy .beautiful forever.
and achieve a excellent mark in the end of the year.
dream of the day we fly to american together.
Remember to take care of yourself and be happy。

我现在在刷分数。 最好哪位大哥大姐能直接帮帮直接改改。。。

会一直加下去的。。。有劳了。。。

我一句句来改吧，尽量不改变你原来的意思。although this doll is not gorgeous, not exquisite,not valuable .（这三个not用得太勉强。可以写成 not gorgeous, exquisite and valuable）even if simple and poor （要跟上一句连接的话，用even though it is simple and poor）.
it expresses my most heartfelt benediction（祝福不用benediction。这个词主要是用于宗教相关的，而且偏向于仪式。意思也是庄重的，如恩赐。普通的用blessing就行了。） for my precious friend Vivi.
I sincere bless you will be happiness （sincerely bless you happy） . healthy .beautiful forever.
and achieve a （an） excellent mark in the end of the year （by the end of the year）.
dream of the day we fly to american together （用 dreaming 吧。更好的我认为是 i have been dreaming）.
Remember to take care of yourself and be happy。
你离她很远吧？我觉得你表达的这一段有比较强的距离感。前面用来修饰礼物的谦卑语气比较重（gorgeous 跟 poor差距很大啊），而且修饰的词用太多，可以考虑删减一些。考取好成绩可以算是又一句话，建议用i wish来引导。

Although this doll looks simple and poor, it expresses my most heartfelt blessings for my precious friend Vivi. I sincere bless you happy , healthy and beautiful forever. Wish you achieve a excellent mark by the end of the year. Dream of the day we fly to American together. Remember to take care of yourself and be happy.

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