TOEFL TPO3 独立写作 求批改求拍砖~~

TOEFL TPO3 独立写作 求批改求拍砖~~

Suffered from the great pressure and defeated by the material society. Undoubtedly, when facing the questions whether it is more important to keep old friends than to make new friends or not, I would like to take an 'agreement' as my response.

Where I stand, an old friend are easier to communicate with than a new one. For instance, my elder sister keeps an friendship with her primary classmates, Jo, for more than fifteen years. They two did not contact often since my elder sister's friend went to England 5 years ago. This winter holiday, Jo came back from abroad , at the same time , my elder sister was just broke up with her boyfriend. So, after Jo's comming back, eqquiped with there understanding to each other, The old friendship was imperceptibly renewed, and they became even closer than before. Thus, an old friend is much easier to get along with.

Besides,an old friend is one who can point out your drawbacks without hesitation.Obviously, an old friend may be a friend who once spent a long period of time with you. Since part of the life experience is shared, a relation carried two true hearts is more likely to obtain. There goes a saying that 'good advice often jars on the ear', and an old friend is someone who can give you good advice. However, a new friend will not tell you your disadvances concerned your character which he does not have a deep awareness about.

Admittedly, it is also neccesary to make new friends. The reason lies in that staying at one place for one's whole life is not possible. Meanwhile, the early stages of a relationship's development is enjoyable. As a result, making friend in differant places is a must-to-do task.

To conclude, the option of keeping an old friend gains more weight than making new friends. What's more, it is also inevitable for us to halt on the way of making new friends. Friendship is the marriage of the heart, and friendship which have experienced the life is the marriage of the soul—never ever parts.

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Suffered from the great pressure (of something) and defeated by the material (materializing) society, undoubtedly, When faced (facing) with the question (problem of) whether it is more important to keep old friends than to mank(make) new friends or not, I would like to /take an 'agree' as my response/ (respond with agreement).
From where I stand, an old friend are (is) easier to communicate with than a new one. For instance, my elder sister keeps (an)(delete) friendship with her primary classmate, Jo, for more than fifteen years. They (two)(delete) did not contact (keep contact) (often)(delete) since my elder sister's friend went to England 5(five) years ago. This winter holiday, Jo came back (from abroad)(delete) and at the same time my elder sister (was just broke up)(had just broken up) with her boyfriend. So, after Jo's comming back, eqquiped with there (their) understanding to each other, The old friendship was imperceptibly renewed, and they became even closer than before. Thus, an old friend is much easier to talk with.
Besides,an old friend (is one who) (delete) can point out your drawbacks without hesitation.Obviously, an old friend may be a friend who once spent a long period of time with you. Since part of the life experience is shared, a relation(ship) (carried) (with) two true hearts is more likely to (obtain) (what do you want to express here? To maintain?). There (goes) (is) a saying that 'good advice often jars on the ear', and an old friend is someone who can give you good advice. However (On the contrary), a new friend will (might) not tell you your (disadvances) (weaknesses) concerned (with) your character which (s)he does not (have a deep awareness about) (alert).
(Admittedly) (what do you want to say?), it is also (neccesary) (necessary) to make new friends. The reason (lies in) (is) that staying at one place for (one's) (the) whole life is not possible. Meanwhile, the early stages of a relationship's development (is) (are) (more) enjoyable. As a result, making friend in differant (different) places (and stages) is a must-to-do task.
To conclude, the option of keeping an old friend gains more weight than making new friends. What's more, it is also inevitable for us to halt on the way of making new friends. Friendship is the marriage of the heart, and (a) (delete) friendship (which have) (delete) experienced the life is the marriage of the soul—never ever parts.

TPO3独立写作题目：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
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It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
Friends play important roles in our life; they share our happiness and help solve our problems. Is it more important to keep our old friends than it is to make new friends? As far as I am concerned, old friendship deserves more care and concern, because old friends are often more trustworthy. I will elaborate as follows.
(强调重要性）
People get in touch with a much larger amount of acquaintances and friends, as the Internet has made communication much conveniently and as people’s social circles expand dramatically. While some people think it is more important to make new friends, I believe old friendship deserves more care and concern, because old friends are often more trustworthy. I will elaborate as follows.
(说现象）

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