My winter holiday was very exciting. I went to Ha'erbin to spend my holiday with my cousin Peter.I didn't want to go out first because of it was very cold outside.
Then Peter invited me to skating. I was interesting . But it was my first time to skate because I had many many falls and I was black and blue all over .
However , Peter was a good teacher .
He never stopped teaching me and encouraging me .Finally Icould skate because his hard work ! We had a wonderful time .But the next day I got a bad cold because the cold weather.
My winter holiday was very exciting. I went to Ha'erbin to spend my holiday with my cousin Peter.I didn't want to go out first because of it was very cold outside.(去掉）
Then Peter invited me to skating-skate. I was interesting -ineterested. But --andit was my first time to skate because -soI had many many falls and I was black and blue all over .
However , Peter was a good teacher .
He never stopped teaching me and encouraging me .Finally Icould skate because--of his hard work ! We had a wonderful time .But the next day I got a bad cold because -forthe cold weather.
第二行 at first of 去掉
第三行 interesting 改成interested，because 改成so
第六行 because 改成because of 或者改成with有由于之意
最后一行 because 改成because of
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